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browna3
02-09-2010, 01:48 PM
http://photos-h.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc3/hs178.snc3/20562_476915275531_647225531_11010261_392658_n.jpg

ok, please critique this. Its the first draft/version of an advertising poster for a rubber duck emporium.

DrakenViator
02-10-2010, 02:01 AM
Well... It looks a little flat. Anything that you could do to help the images pop out a little bit? Perhaps a drop shadow on either the text or the ducks, maybe even just some additional shading to add to the 3d look?

Just a few thoughts

westyfield
02-10-2010, 11:43 AM
I'll jump on in with the spelling and grammar pedantry: If it's the rubber duck emporium belonging to Bob then it should say Bob's Rubber Duck Emporium Warehouse.

Also, like Draken said, perhaps a shadow on the dark side of the duck would make it look more 3D.

AdeptAbyss
02-13-2010, 10:24 AM
i'm just gonna say I'm scared...

ForGlory&Pain
02-13-2010, 02:00 PM
Professional opinion: Eyes and beak look rough and coarse, mabye a little more stylized and yes, drop shadows. Top font looks Nintendo retro, but using the same font on the bottom looks decidedly non-pro, I'd use a different font alltogether. Lastly, JPG compression is nasty, don't let it touch your proofs at all.

Not too hot on how long the business name is, but it's your call, also westy can grammar police me if im wrong, but I think the top should read:

oohh ducky,
you naughty vixen!



Or go all andy warhol on it.
http://farm2.static.flickr.com/1423/649357678_db25c092eb.jpg

browna3
02-13-2010, 03:21 PM
i dont normaly use jpg compression. when saving for my lecturers i usualy use bmp.

anyway, i've changed it since this one. and fixed my spelling.

still have several weeks left to do this so im gonna take my time.

browna3
02-24-2010, 02:18 PM
shameless self bump with version 2!

this time in png format

http://www.tacticalsites.com/~browna3/images/Version2.png